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Scarlet Ibis version 2 by ~deathdog394:icondeathdog394:



I see you now, my Scarlet Ibis, forever still, caused by my knot of spite,
never to enjoy the triumphs you achieved.

                            Why?

Because of me, because I had to press you of my own
jealous pride's accord.

You never complained, whined, or showed me discontent;
always eager to show me your progress and better
yourself.

Scarlet Ibis, I have done you wrong. I have effectively
ended your campaign to happiness,

                            Why?

Because of my knot of spite awoken by my thinking we had failed,
that you had failed me.

Now there is but one thing for me to do, my last respect to you,
My Scarlet Ibis.

I shall give you a burial that your Scarlet Ibis
would be jealous of.

Then I shall assume my place, Dissapointment.

I see you now my Scarlet Ibis, Forever still,
Caused by my knot of spite.
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Author's Comments

another version to the first, plz tell me which u like better

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:iconrubygirl12345:
Once again, the choice you have on words makes me cry.
It's so beautiful, it almost feels as if it was alive.
Really great job. :)

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~That's why the internet was invented! To stalk those sexy sexy men.. And not have a restraining order slapped in your face.

~"When I said we were having a sleepover, that wasn't what I meant.... But you're welcome to do that again."
:icondeathdog394:
thx, so u like my other version better then the original?
:iconrubygirl12345:
Yeah. It's the same though, right?
Just longer. I think the longer one is a bit better, it doesn't really matter though...
I think...

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~That's why the internet was invented! To stalk those sexy sexy men.. And not have a restraining order slapped in your face.

~"When I said we were having a sleepover, that wasn't what I meant.... But you're welcome to do that again."
:iconhirohitothelegend:
This one.

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I am a beginning artist and writer. I am working on a story that I want to become a manga.

_______________________________
SAC: A professional artist club

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~Super-Artists-Club
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:icondeathdog394:
it is, yet the ending is different for the 2nd version. and thx for your opinion, it really helps me better myself with my art
:iconrubygirl12345:
Welcome. :glomp:

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~That's why the internet was invented! To stalk those sexy sexy men.. And not have a restraining order slapped in your face.

~"When I said we were having a sleepover, that wasn't what I meant.... But you're welcome to do that again."
:iconm00nlightsonata:
This one has more closure, the added extra bit of length was needed. I especially like the layout/structure of this.

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eat shit

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